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Tattered clips of sunny smiles
strewn about throughout the aisles,
tipped and spilled to much dismay
those memories of yesterday.
Volunteered upon this path
oblivious to the aftermath,
the possibility it seemed
of failure was an absurd dream.
Torn from the ground we built upon
moonlight burned the summer song,
undermined the very heart
of the bedrock where we saw it start.
Winter caused the soul to say
an audible wish for a different day,
Without the strength to go away
it's come to this so here we stay.
:)
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:iconmagicaljoey:
I agree, very nice rhythm. It reminds me of ghosts of weddings to be honest. I like the way you have used the rhyme but none of it seems forced or misplaced.
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Artphul1 Dec 24, 2012  Professional General Artist
I love the impression you took from this piece!
This one was a joy to write.
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:iconmagicaljoey:
That came through, I think, in the ease it was to read.
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BlackVeggieCat Dec 23, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
nice rhythm to this!
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Artphul1 Dec 23, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you. :hug:
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